15 x 15 - Sasuke-Kiba
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purplekitteTitle: Sasuke-Kiba
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'Verse: Naruto
Claim: general series
Characters/Pairing: hints of Kiba/Sasuke and Sasuke/Naruto, Akamaru
Rating: PG
Warnings: many off-screen character deaths
Disclaimer: I don't own Naruto.
Summary: Sasuke walks back through the front door.
Table/Prompt: Untheme table 5, return
The amount of effort that had gone into rescuing Sasuke, it wasn’t fair that he would walk back into the village. No, what wasn’t fair was that he had to do it on his turn on gate duty.
Kiba cursed and ground his teeth at this being his luck. Akamaru just growled a little. Kiba sniffed and cussed louder. Sasuke was greeted back to Konohagakure with, “Fuck Uchiha do you stink. Bathed in the last week?”
Sasuke looked down at the cracking dried blood on his hands like he was just noticing it was there. “No.”
Deadpan ice bastard as ever. “I should fuckin’ arrest you. In fact, no should. The ANBU should be dragging your carcass into the Hokage’s office right now.”
“What’ll that old lady do? Where’s Naruto?”
“Sasuke…” Kiba hadn’t expected to pity the bastard. Like a rabid dog. Poor baby who needed to be held and stroked and comforted but really needed to be put down.
“I killed Itachi. Where’s Naruto?” Sasuke’s voice was steady and emotionless but Kiba was used to listening for sounds humans couldn’t hear, so he got the growing confusion in those glassy eyes.
Akamaru slunk over to lick at a cleaner bit of Sasuke’s ankle. Kiba agreed with the sentiment. “Sasuke, Tsunade’s not Hokage. She died ten years ago. And Naruto died more than that.”
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purplekitte'Verse: Naruto
Claim: general series
Characters/Pairing: hints of Kiba/Sasuke and Sasuke/Naruto, Akamaru
Rating: PG
Warnings: many off-screen character deaths
Disclaimer: I don't own Naruto.
Summary: Sasuke walks back through the front door.
Table/Prompt: Untheme table 5, return
The amount of effort that had gone into rescuing Sasuke, it wasn’t fair that he would walk back into the village. No, what wasn’t fair was that he had to do it on his turn on gate duty.
Kiba cursed and ground his teeth at this being his luck. Akamaru just growled a little. Kiba sniffed and cussed louder. Sasuke was greeted back to Konohagakure with, “Fuck Uchiha do you stink. Bathed in the last week?”
Sasuke looked down at the cracking dried blood on his hands like he was just noticing it was there. “No.”
Deadpan ice bastard as ever. “I should fuckin’ arrest you. In fact, no should. The ANBU should be dragging your carcass into the Hokage’s office right now.”
“What’ll that old lady do? Where’s Naruto?”
“Sasuke…” Kiba hadn’t expected to pity the bastard. Like a rabid dog. Poor baby who needed to be held and stroked and comforted but really needed to be put down.
“I killed Itachi. Where’s Naruto?” Sasuke’s voice was steady and emotionless but Kiba was used to listening for sounds humans couldn’t hear, so he got the growing confusion in those glassy eyes.
Akamaru slunk over to lick at a cleaner bit of Sasuke’s ankle. Kiba agreed with the sentiment. “Sasuke, Tsunade’s not Hokage. She died ten years ago. And Naruto died more than that.”
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Date: 2008-05-09 02:15 am (UTC)And Naruto died more than that.
You might want to change that to something more like, "Along with Naruto" or something, 'cause you can't really die 'more'.
But besides that, the saaad D:
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Date: 2008-05-09 04:55 am (UTC)That actually hurt me.
Which is a good thing, only really good fics can hit me like a punch to the gut like that.
That line, that really got me. It really shows how damaged Sasuke is and how (in this story at least) he's past the point of no return.
And of course, the end, that was actually really surprising for me. I like how you don't show the passage of time until that last line. Having that there with the deaths makes them even more upsetting.
Great work. It's been awhile since a fic has really hit home like that.
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Date: 2008-05-09 04:56 am (UTC)no subject
Date: 2008-05-09 03:09 pm (UTC)no subject
Date: 2008-05-09 03:12 pm (UTC)no subject
Date: 2008-05-09 04:47 pm (UTC)P.S. Don't worry about the wording at the end, I thought it made sense and sounded like something someone would say. It's got a nice flow.